The legion

Just a short story that I made up in about 20mins. No particular purpose, just to share it with you guys. I hope to write a few more or maybe make a little ongoing series Hope you enjoy. Rate and Sub!

Pain seared through his body, burning his mind and tearing at his nerves like a knife. His hand shot down to the remains of his once perfect leg, which now lay in shreds hanging limp off his calf. A thick, warm liquid gushed onto his hand and the floor; he knew instantly what it was. His vision started to blur, the battlefield looking twice as terrifying with double the amount of orks. The battle cries and screams that pierced the night sky started to fade, until he could only make out his own heartbeat, which did nothing to settle his nerves; for it was slowing at an alarming rate.

He vaguely registered an armoured fist grasp his shoulder, and drag him to the safety of a nearby barricade. The unknown liberator opened a flask fastened to his belt, and let a little of the liquor inside dribble onto the guard’s lips. The man’s senses started to return, his hearing and sight clearing, the battlefield resembled normality again, if this insanity could be considered normal. He turned slowly towards his saviour, and nearly went back into his state of shock. Before him knelt a Space Marine. Clad in jet black armour adorned with skulls, bones – and flames. A warrior of the damned. The legion of nightmares, the legion of terror, the legion of the damned. And then, all too soon, his fantasy ended as the barricade behind him exploded in a mass of splinters and flames.

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demonkillerdan19 (Over a year ago): - delete
i dont get it. Was the space marine with chaos, or the imperium?

BladeofKings (Over a year ago): - delete
Probably no one you've heard of. Been published in lots of magazines, won a few writing contests, etc. Jim. Unfortunately I can't give out his last name for privacy reasons though, sorry

bakerfromjamaica (Over a year ago): - delete
Thanks for the comments guys, I really aprecciate feedback so i can get better. Also, I really don't approve of those sniper ratings, its not actually that funny at all. Oh yeah @ Bladeof Kings, who's your granddad?

MistaShade (Over a year ago): - delete
Ooo cool. Nice writing

BladeofKings (Over a year ago): - delete
Not too shabby with a pen at all! (or typewriter, as the case may be.)

4/5. 5/5 rating, but for some weird reason I never could stand the word warm. I guess I'm, what the heck, 5/5.

Just FTR, sorry about the two jerks who gave you a 1/5 rating...some people never grow up. They're probably jealous, that's quite nice writing. This from a kid who's grandfather is a published author....

kooleyo (Over a year ago): - delete
legion of they're like the lone wolves of 40k don't help wounded people, just look extremely cool and kick butt

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Added: March 23, 2010
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Short story about 40k :D

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