'Bait' ( Short Story)

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'Bait' ( Short Story)

Post by Jakian » Sun Jul 22, 2012 12:15 am

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Re: 'Bait' ( Short Story)

Post by Tau+One » Thu Aug 09, 2012 12:22 am

I thought she was going to be the bandits bait for him and he would be capture. I read too much Warhammer 40k Black Library stuff so I expected a doom filled ending. Its too flat dull and easily resolved. in my opinion. Give me more of Saph, more back-story more motivation for bitter vengeance, more action!
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Re: 'Bait' ( Short Story)

Post by Jakian » Fri Aug 31, 2012 12:59 am

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